Moon Walkers Don’t never go home
As a child Juan solo walked on the moon. Ever since hes
gotten back, the world has never been the same. The ground is boring, hes
pissed all the time, hes issing something. The moon. Realistically he will
never return to it. This dilemma is stopping him from trying anything he does. He
has post dramatic relief symptoms, where he has visions of being back on the
moon. He feels departed from the world, and so different. Just stares at the
moon all day. He gets into trouble when he has a vision in the wrong place and
the police arrest him. He lands in a psych ward. While in the psych ward on
drugs, his mom visits him. Only to tell him he was never on the moon as a
child.
Memory’s
of Juan on the moon as a child takes him back to the best times of his 24-year-old
life. He remembers being on the moon and getting back on Earth. A tear falls
from his face and the loud splash it makes on the ground somehow clicks him out
of the dream.
He’s on a coat rack in the mall and
everyone is looking at him. He slowly gets off and walks away awkwardly quick
wiping the tears off his face. He rounds the corner away from the people and
starts walking again.
In another store looking for some
baby wipes, he comes across toothpaste. Another memory hits him.
He is back in the shuttle and he
squeezes toothpaste onto a plate, puts it in the microwave and it comes out as
a chicken. Him and his space
shuttle crew start chowing away and he has a giant smile on his face.
Back to reality he is chewing on
toothpaste with a twisted clown smile and rubbing toothpaste on his body. A
security guard tackles him and Juan is shouting out obscene fun space voyage nonsense.
They arrest him and take him to the station.
In jail a few other jailies come up
to him. At this point Juan is having another flashback of himself putting a
space helmet on another crew member. He ends up breaking the neck of the other
inmate and his hands are just shaking.
Pleading to be insane and showing a
lot of insane qualities he ends up in a mental institution. Now at the mental
institution he is being medicated and everything gets trippy.
His mom visits him, so sad and
stressed. Juan explains how life on Earth doesn’t feel right and he misses the
moon. His mom stands up and explains that he was never on the moon! After
saying that she just walked away and a pin of the space voyage falls out of her
purse. Dum dum dummmmmmm….
Martin, I love the title. So weird and wonderful. This idea is a great genesis of that weird title...
ReplyDeleteHowever, it seems waaaay to complicated to shoot. You have at least six different locations: the moon, Juan's house, a department store, a toothpaste store, a psych ward, a mental institution. You've also described many of Juan's emotions rather than his actions. I don't know what he does when he "gets pissed and feels like something is missing." I can't SEE that in your treatment.
My advice is to take the bare bones of this story (boy who has been to the moon misses the moon, but everyone tells him he's never really been to the moon, yet he tries to go back) and make a more simple narrative. Maybe he is building a DIY rocket ship in his bedroom and everyone keeps telling him he's crazy. That requires fewer locations but still gives you a chance to tell this story. There are probably a million other ways to do it, too.
Great idea, but simplify the execution.